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PostSubject: the elements   Fri Oct 10, 2008 10:27 pm

Snow,
the silence it brings
Grants me time to think.
It soft bitter touch upon the world
Feels like heaven.
I look at its extravigent beauty
And it shows me god.
I forget the harsh cold
As I look in awe.


Water,
its calm wakes leave me breathless.
The way it flows into the most marvelous spectacles.
Its ever expanding oceans hold the wonders of the world.
It supplies the world with life.
The waves sway to and fro,
forever grasping my thoughts.

Fire,
it lends heat and light
to the cold and blind
it ignites war and death
for there is nothing left
except black ashes
for only there to be
the raw power that once was
and never to be again
burn away the scipturs of defeat
only to be renewed
with the solace of beginning


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PostSubject: Re: the elements   Mon Nov 10, 2008 7:36 pm

Wind,
Life's breath and bane
The silence shatterer,
carrier of rain,
motive of the feather

Sweet whispering
from cottonwood leaves
or bellowing
through derelict caves

Lift hawk-tails and spirits
with a midday breeze;
consuming souls
from a hurricane

Capricious wind
Untouchable foe,
ever-present friend
Master of himself alone,
beginning to the end.
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PostSubject: Re: the elements   Fri Nov 21, 2008 8:55 pm

So Shane and Alex, you guys wanna help us out a bit? We're looking for some feedback. Would you be willing to help us?
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PostSubject: reply   Sun Nov 23, 2008 12:38 pm

Help you with your element poetry?
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PostSubject: Re: the elements   Mon Nov 24, 2008 1:07 pm

we just wanted to hear comments and criticisms, we want help so we can improve our writing. With all of our writing, not just these in this thread.
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PostSubject: Re: the elements   Mon Nov 24, 2008 1:29 pm

but if anyone wanted to do an earth one feel free
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